Can I suggest moderating the language a bit to lessen the hyperbole in the text?
NXT is a revolutionary system
Bitcoin is revolutionary. Nxt is evolutionary.
that has been able to completely remake what spending money looks like.
I hope not! I hope it makes spending money easy, like spending cash is easy. That's not "completely remaking". How about "... able to make online transactions simple and fast, just like working with cash"
Transferring money electronically now for the first time is incredibly secure without fear of identity theft or accounts being taken over.
This is simply false, sorry. It's no more safe than cash, with all if the security implications that entails. Many accounts are hacked; people choose weak passwords; they mistype account numbers.
You COULD argue that it protects against identity theft because the system is pseudonymous.
It is blazingly fast compared to yesterday’s systems because it is thousands of times quicker than waiting for traditional bank transfers to clear or waiting for credit card transactions to be redeemed.
What does "blazingly fast" mean? What evidence do have that it's "thousands of times faster" than bank transfers? Thousands of times faster than Visa transactions, which are instant?
And best of all, NXT is now the greenest way to transact in money.
Also not true. Cash is very green. Literally, in many cases. I think you mean "transact using cryptocurrrencies", since I doubt Nxt is more green than a wire transfer.
The amount of energy used in one day to run the traditional financial systems will power the NXT network for years.
Bold claim. Source?
It does all this while being safer and costing less fees for vendors.
Less compared to what?
NXT is made possible through a newly designed decentralized technology built on top of the internet in an innovative way that could not have existed before.
Not true. It existed with Bitcoin, and several years before that with HadhCash!
The NXT platform uses new complex mathematical algorithms
The algorithms aren't new. The implementations of the algorithms are.
and a specially designed network
The network is decentralized, not designed. "design" implies control.
of vast numbers of small but powerful and efficient nodes which monitor and relay transactions throughout its network.
source? Evidence? How big is "vast"? How efficient are they if a large number of them are running old software, or are on forks? How can you back this up?
Personally, I think what should set Nxt apart is a reliance on FACTS and not exaggeration for marketing. If I want bold claims that can't be backed up by evidence, I'll look at investing in one of the 20 scam coins that were released this week.
Your text is good, but it needs to be toned down and fact-checked.
